We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

Computers
are a relatively new invention. The first
computers
were built fifty years ago and it is only in the
last
thirty or so years that their influence has affected our everyday life. Personal
computers
were introduced as recently as the early eighties. In
this
short
time
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they have made a tremendous impact on our lives. We are now so dependent on
computers
that it is hard to imagine what things would be like today without them. You have only got to go into a bank when their main computer is broken to appreciate the chaos that would occur if
computers
were suddenly removed
world-wide
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. In the future
computers
will be used to create bigger and even more sophisticated
computers
. The prospects for
this
are quite alarming. They will be so complex that no individual could hope to understand how they work. They will bring a lot of benefits but they will
also
increase the potential for unimaginable chaos. They will,
for example
, be able to fly planes and they will be able to
co ordinate
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the movements of several planes in the vicinity of an airport. Providing all the
computers
are working correctly nothing can go wrong. If one small program fails — disaster. There is a certain inevitability that technology will progress and become increasingly complex. We should,
however
, ensure that we are still in a position where we are able to control technology. It will be all too easy to suddenly discover that technology is controlling us. By
then
it might be too late I believe that it is very important to be suspicious of the benefits that
computers
will bring and to make sure that we never become totally dependent on a completely technological world.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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