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With growing population in cities, more and more people live in a home with small or no outdoor areas. Is it a positive or negative development?

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In modern society,
people
 prefer living in the
city
it
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which
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causes rising
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increases
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 the price of a house,
that is
 why
people
, who are living in the
city
, choose
home
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homes
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 with small or no outdoor area.
People
 have different opinions on the
effects
 of
this
 issue. The negative and positive
effects
 will be discussed
as well as
 my personal opinion regarding
this
 issue. On
one
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the one
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 hand,
the
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apply
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smaller
houses
 and flats have positive
effects
to
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on
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 individuals,
such
 as
save
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saving
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 money or
time
. In modern society,
people
should
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apply
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spend
much
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apply
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time
 at work, so if
people
 have a small house or flat it will
make reducing
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reduce
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 the
time
 for cleaning. The
people
 chose the smaller
houses
 or flats because of their budget. The small
houses
 will help
people
 stay in the
city
. As seen clearly,
the
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apply
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small
houses
give
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have
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positive
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a positive
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 effect
to
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on
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people
 who are living in the
city
.
One
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On
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 the other hand,
although
 the small size family,
such
 as
one-parent
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the one-parent
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 family or the nuclear family, increased in modern society, the small
houses
 or flats are not suitable for the families who
has
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have
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the
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apply
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children.
For example
, the juveniles need their own space,
however
, the small house may
cannot
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not
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 provide that to them.
In addition
, the
houses
, which do not have outdoor areas, have
the
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an
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 air circumstance problem. It is necessary to children for their immune system, and it
gives
Verb problem
has
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 negative
effects
 to grew up the children.
Furthermore
, the lack of space causes mental and health problems to
the
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apply
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families. In conclusion, in terms of
time
 and money,
the
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apply
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houses
 with small or no outdoor areas can
give
Verb problem
have
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 positive impacts,
however
, the negative
effects
 are much bigger and
serious
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more serious
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. I strongly believe that it does more harm than good.
People
 should consider
this
 problem and
try
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try to
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 find
the
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a
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 solution
of
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to
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this
 issue.
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