The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

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The chart illustrates the export earnings of a nation from different

products

in comparing two years (2015 and 2016),

while

the table describes the

amount

percentage difference in dispatched goods in

mentioned

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the mentioned

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period. (The

amount

is stated in American $).

Overall

, after comparing the

products

income in 2

limit

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limits

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year

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years

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it indicates that the nation received the highest export

amount

from petroleum

products

with the lowest export from

textiles

. Agriculture

products

and

textiles

obtained the same money

in contrast

with other

products

in 2016

while

there is not any similarity between gained values from transferred commodities in 2015. In terms of petroleum

products

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,products

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there is a slight difference which demonstrates that the commodity brought the highest

amount

with more than 60 billion dollars in 2016 which there is a 3 % improvement

compare

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compared

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to the previous year. There is a significant rise for

textiles

and engineered

products

which respectively reported 15, 24% and 8.15%. Gems and

jewelry

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jewellery

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with agricultural

products

in contrast

with

textiles

and engineered

products

are the traded

merchandises

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merchandise

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with

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apply

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slight progress which is 5.18% and 0.81%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, amount, textiles with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
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8Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

181 words

6.00

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Single idea per paragraph

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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Topic Vocabulary:

export value
trend analysis
anomalies
percentage change
sector analysis
global demand
domestic production
economic conditions
technological advancements
international regulations
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