The bar chart The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart reveals the
electricity
production
and
consumption
in
top
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the top
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ten leading
countries
in 2014. In general, China topped the list in both
production
and
consumption
while
Korea was the country with the smallest
amount
of produced and used
electricity
.
Additionally
, most
countries
, except for Germany, generated more
electricity
than they used. As can be seen from the chart, China had by far the greatest
amount
of
electricity
production
at 5,398
billion
kWh
and
consumption
at 5,322
billion
kWh
. It was followed by the United States with 4,099
billion
kWh
in
production
and 3,866
billion
kWh
in
consumption
.
By contrast
, Korea only produced 485.1
billion
kWh
and used 449.5
billion
kWh
, which was around
one tenth
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of those of the other two
countries
. The
amount
of
electricity
production
in Brazil and Germany was slightly higher than that in Korea, but it was under 600
billion
kWh
.
Furthermore
, Germany used 582.5
billion
kWh
, which was even greater than that of Canada,
where
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which
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generated 618.9
billion
kWh
and consumed only 499.9
billion
kWh
. Meanwhile, Russia recorded mostly equal
amount
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amounts
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of
electricity
production
(1,057
billion
kWh
) and
consumption
(1,038
billion
kWh
). Japan produced and used more
electricity
than India, but the figures
of
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for
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these two
countries
did not exceed 1,000
billion
kWh
.
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