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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
diagram
 shows the
machine
 introducing energy by using the
power
 of waves. it is clear from the
diagram
 that, the mechanism of
this
machine
and
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emphasize
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emphasizes
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 the way of transforming the
power
 of waves
to
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into
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and
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electric energy. And the
second
diagram
 shows, suggest
two
location
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locations
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according to
 costs and the amount of energy
producing
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produced
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 based
for
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on
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 each site.
according to
diagram
 number
one
, we can
noticed
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notice
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 that
,
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 the
machine
 has
two
 chambers,
one
it
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is locate
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is located
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 at the bottom of
machine
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the machine
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 that
allow
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allows
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 the wave and water
comes
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come
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 in, by the
power
 of water pushing up and create a flow of air
then
 they enforce the turbine to move and by
this
movement
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,movement
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 the
machine
introduce
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introduces
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 electric
power
 .
however
, the
two
 places
suggestion
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suggested
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,
one
 close to the land I will call
it
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apply
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place
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to place
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 A and the other
one
 offshore I will call
it
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apply
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place
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to place
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 B,
place
one
less
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with less
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 cost but
introducing
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introduces
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low
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the low
a low
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 amount of
power
 and
place
 B,
high
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a high
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 cost and
introducing
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introduces
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large
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a large
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 amount of
power
 .
To sum up
, both places as we noticed,
has
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have
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 advantages and disadvantages, taking choices
it
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depends on the capital assets we are planning to spend and the risk
by
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of
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 choosing between
two
 places .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words diagram, machine, power, two, one, place with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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