The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts compare how many trips are made by kids travelling to and from school in five different
transports
: namely, Change the wording
means of transport
modes of transport
types of transport
kinds of transport
car
passenger
, walking, cycling, walking and bus
, bus
, in a country between 1999 and 2010. Figures are given in millions per year. Overall
, it can be seen that walking and car
passenger
was the highest trip in 1999 and in 2010 respectively while
the number of other types were
nearly both in 1999 and 2010.
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was
To begin
with
in 1990, the number of walking, the highest Add a comma
,with
transport
, was just over 12 million
more than car
passenger
by three times Fix the agreement mistake
passengers
while
the figure for cycling, walking and bus
, bus
were approximately six million
.
In 2010, over 13 million
of
Change preposition
apply
car
passenger
which was the highest Fix the agreement mistake
passengers
transport
was
more than walking which was the Unnecessary verb
apply
second
transport
at 6 million
. In addition
, 2 million
of
cycling was the lowest Change preposition
apply
transport
and lower than walking and bus
and bus
at three and five respectively.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, passenger, bus, transport, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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