Some people say modern innovations bring a lot of problems than benefits. Do you agree or disagree?

There has always been a point of contention whether the drawbacks caused by the latest inventions eclipse the positives or not. If questioned, I strongly disagree with the statement
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and believe that the cons of
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justified in the ensuing paragraphs. To commence with, the most significant motive behind any research is to develop new technology or product which is superior to
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former ones. By
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version. Ergo, the new version, in a true sense, must be more beneficial.
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can be exemplified by the invention of mobile phones which was urgently required to be thought of
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the fact that communication between people had become very arduous.
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some demerits,
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plus points are far richer.
Moreover
, it is the gap of understanding that some may consider the newly developed innovations as more detrimental.
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inventions take time to get
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convinced by the major class of
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be fruitful. To quote an instance, the erection of fly-overs in
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crowded city might be troublesome for many who do not understand the long-term rewards it can offer to the population.
To conclude
, the latest developments might have some demerits;
however
, I strongly disagree with the notion that these demerits outweigh all the positive effects offered. The compelling reason behind my way of thinking is that the new advancements mean more advantages
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previous tribulations. The other logic to support my view is the gap
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knowledge of
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merits of
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progressions. (words---301, errors—12)

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