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The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Sumarise the information by selecting and reporting the main eatures, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Sumarise the information by selecting and reporting the main eatures, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph elucidates the segment of four different materials from the 1982 to 2010 period in
a
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apply
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several
country
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countries
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. In 1982,only 0% of
aluminium
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the aluminium
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can
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cans
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 were recycled.
Thus
, in 2010
this
rate
reache
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reached
reaches
reach
 a peak of 45% and
similarly
, only 0% of plastic recycling in 1982
instead
 of there is
littel
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little
 increased
into
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to
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 9% in 2010.
Besides
, paper and
carboard
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cardboard
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 have
highest
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the highest
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rate
 in 1982. It
have
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has
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62
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a 62
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%
rate
 and in 2010 it grew
into
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to
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 70%. The
last
, glass containers are the
second
 higher in 1982 with
the
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apply
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50% percentage and raise
into
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to
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 60% in 2010. To recapitulate, aluminium cans grow
than
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more than
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the
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apply
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others
have
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at have
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stagnant
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a stagnant
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rate
.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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