The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart gives you information on how
children
travelled to and from school
in the years 1990 and 2010. The modes of transport were by car
, walking, cycling, walking and by bus
and by bus
only. A striking feature in this
chart is that the number
of children
who travelled by car
has increased from 1990 to 2010. In 1990 the most number
of trips
per year by children
were by walking. However
in Add a comma
However,
2010
it reduced to up to 6 Add a comma
2010,
million
trips
per year. The total number
of trips
to school
by cycling and walking and bus
were
approximately 6 Change the verb form
was
million
in 1990. However
the number
of trips
to school
by cycling reduced
to 2 Add a missing verb
was reduced
million
and the number
of trips
to school
by walking and bus
reduced
to about 3 Add a missing verb
was reduced
million
in 2010. There isn’t a significant change to the number
of trips
to school
by bus
. In 1990 it was about 7 million
and in 2010 it came down to approximately 5 million
. In 1990 the amount
of Change the quantifier
number
children
who travelled to and from school
by car
was significantly lower than the children
who travelled Correct quantifier usage
number of children
by
walking. Change preposition
on
In contrast
in 2010
the Add a comma
2010,
number
of children
who travelled to school
by car
increased and the number
of children
walking to school
has
decreased. In 2010 Unnecessary verb
apply
children
travelled to school
by bus
more than they cycled to school
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