The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
The line chart demonstrates the usage of fish and various types of meat from 1979 until 2004 in a European country. In general,beef meat was the most
consumptional
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consumption
food in 1979,followed by chicken and lamb.Fish,
however
,wasn't consumed like them. When looked
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detail,consumption of beef and lamb
drammatically
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went down almost twice from 1979 to 2004.
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the contrary,
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which
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shows
the
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chicken usage approximately increased from 150 grams per person per week to 250 grams.
Consuming
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of
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fish,
however
,wasn't change significantly.It's
around
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50 grams since 1979.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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