More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In these days overweight is serious

concern specially

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concern, especially

concern especially

in children. Eating pattern completely have been changed not only in children as well as in adults.

Specially

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Especially

developed

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developing

countries that problem is in peak. Children from starting age starts gaining weight and become overweight in

few years

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a few years

. It has some serious effects going to explain in following paragraphs

To begin

overweight children cannot focus in studies due to laziness because

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the more

they eat more, they become lazy.

Moreover

, that children always be sick because if child have perfect weight according to age and height they always be playing, jumping and stay healthy.

In addition

, cannot play any sports as any kind of sports want energy and

stamina but

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stamina, but

overweight child

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the overweight child

an overweight child

cannot be

energetic

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energized

and less in stamina.

However

, if we take

example

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the example

an example

of china, I have seen some viral videos of kids in that country start some kind of sports in early age and in Asian

games none

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games, none

other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

country still

beat

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beats

in gaining medals they always stay in

top position

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the top position

because kids have start trained in childhood due to that they cannot be overweight. That problem arising

specially

to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common

especially

in developed countries due to eating habit some kind of snacks and sugary drinks make kids overweight. To conclude being overweight specially for children is not good for them as they are future of wealthy countries if they are not fit, they cannot make some great ideas which lead to country towards success. Healthy mind come with healthy food and healthy food make fit to children.

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Topic Vocabulary:

obesity
sedentary
caloric intake
processed foods
fast food culture
screen time
metabolic disorders
healthcare expenditure
lifestyle diseases
preventative strategies
nutritional education
public health policy
body mass index (BMI)
emotional well-being
stigmatization
exercise regimen
eating habits
junk food
socioeconomic factors
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More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Fully explain your ideas

Although many countries are becoming richer, these societies still have members who are poor and struggle each day to survive. why do you think this happens and what can wealthy societies do to help their poorer citizens ?

Some people prefer to work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that giving longer prison sentences is the best way to reduce crime. Others believe that there are better ways to reduce crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Since the 18th century technological advances have replaced people in the workplace. With today’s technology this process is happening at a greater rate. Technology is increasingly responsible for unemployment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people say learners should start their debating and presentation skills in their early age rather than in their higher institutes. To what extent you agree.