the first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

the first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the average
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energy
use and
consequently
its greenhouse gas emission in an Australian household.
Overall
, there are six different typologies, namely heating, cooling, lighting and other appliances.
Firstly
,
it is clear that
heating and water heating are the most
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in
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of
energy
, with 42 per cent and 30 per cent respectively.
However
, heating results less harmful
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greenhouse
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gas emissions, with only 15% compared to 32% of water heating.
Secondly
, the
third
-largest method of using
energy
is the other appliances with a percentage of 15%
while
its air pollution effect is almost doubled at 28%.
Finally
, the remaining three features, namely refrigeration, cooling and lighting represent together just under a quarter of the totalò of
energy
use, more precisely 14%.
On the other hand
, refrigeration alone reaches a percentage of co2 emission of 14%
while
cooling and lighting have a proportion of 3% and 8% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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