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the bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014

the bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014
#bar #ten #countries #production #consumption #electricity
From the information the country that
have
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generate
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 and utilized more
electricty
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electricity
 is
the
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china and the
korea republic
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Korean Republic
 is the country which has
least
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the least
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 production and
consumption
.
According to
 data given the 2nd largest country in generating and consuming
the
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electricty
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electricity
 is the united states which
has
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 4099
billion
kwh
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kWh
 production and 3866
billion
kwh
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kWh
consumption
.
Where as
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russia
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Russia
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 stands
on
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 the 3rd position for
producing
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the production
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 and utilization of
electricty
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electricity
.
Then
the
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Japan stands below
the
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russia
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Russia
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 which has 936
billion
kwh
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kWh
 of
prodcution
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production
 and 856
billion
kwh
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kWh
 of
consumption
.
On
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In
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 5th position for
prodcuing
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producing
 and
consumption
 of
electricty
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electricity
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there is India.
However
,Canada tends to sit
on
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in
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 6th rank for consuming the 618
billion
kwh
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kWh
 and 499
billion
kwh
 for utilization.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricty, consumption, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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