The pie chart below shows information about different types of pollutants entering in a particular area of ocean in 1997 and 2007

The pie chart below shows information about  different types of pollutants entering  in a particular area of ocean in 1997 and 2007
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proportions of different types of contaminants
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in a specific area of
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in 1997 and 2007.
It is clear that
in 1997, the amount of trash are in the majority and the proportion of air pollution was the lowest.
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, in 2007, most of
pollutants
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are oil
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the minority was agricultural runoff. In 1997, trash is the most popular type of contaminant, at 42% but the figure
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trash dropped nearly threefold to 15% in 2007. Comparatively, there was only 15% of oil in
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area in 1997
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there was a significant increase in the percentage of oil,
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52% and become the largest amount of pollutant at the same time. The figure
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air pollution was only 3% and was the lowest rate in 1997.
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the data about sewage and agricultural runoff are 15% and 25% respectively. In 2007, the percentage of air pollution rose more than five times,
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15%.
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agricultural runoff and sewage decreased to 10% or below.

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