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Some people think that increasing communication usage of computers and mobile phones by young people has had a negative effect on their reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that technology has been disseminated everywhere and It is believed by a segment of society that increasing communication via technology
such
 as laptops, cell phones and so on has had a detrimental impact on
reading
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 and writing proficiency of young individuals.
However
, I disagree with
this
 notion to some extent, which I intend to discuss in the subsequent paragraphs. Mobile applications and desktop software, which provide language
supports
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, have been developed to make user's life easier, but unfortunately
plays
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 a sterling role
to exacerbate
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 their language
skills
. It is generally seen that youngsters these days have installed applications
such
 as Grammarly,
MS-Word
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 in their gadgets which
helps
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help
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 them to write
correct
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 by using auto correction tools, thereby making them oblivious about right and wrong words.
Apart from
this
, communicating via social chatting applications,
for example
, WhatsApp, Facebook and so on, makes people habitant of using slang words and abbreviations which
further
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 them in
troubles
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while
 doing class presentations,
colleagues
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 group discussions and formal meetings as it becomes arduous for them to not to use informal terms.
Therefore
, it worsens
reading
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 and writing
skills
 of young office workers. Communicating with the help of technology proves beneficial as software used by
such
 devices
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 hints of possible vocabulary
while
 writing, not only
improves
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 writing
skills
 but
also
increases
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cognitive
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skills
 of users.
Moreover
, ease of
any
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time availability for chatting, owing to having mobile phones would make
reading
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 and writing
skills
 of individuals more ameliorate.
For instance
, if an employee is writing an email to his or her senior on the laptop, it would be easy for one to write good and
error free
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 writing.
Hence
, sharing views via electronic devices boosts
such
skills
.
To conclude
,
although
 communicating with electronic gadgets
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 a few demerits, it seems more conducive in terms of providing lists of vocabulary lists, improving cognitive
skills
 and easing in accessing devices helps in honing
language
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skills
 of individuals.
Submitted by gillmahira1 on

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