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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What can be done to deal with this situation?

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More and more professionals from developing or underdeveloped countries are choosing to live and work in richer countries.
As a result
, poorer countries will struggle to develop, but
this
 can be tackled by offering more incentives to stay and better living conditions. The main problem faced by poorer countries due to the brain-drain, in fields
such
 as medicine and education, is that they will struggle to develop and find it difficult to improve their economy as well as living conditions. One of the main ways that a developing
country
 can better themselves is through the skills and dedication of their professionals which is negated when they choose to take their skills to benefit another
country
.
Consequently
, less developed countries will not be able to offer their citizens high levels of education or health care, and
this
 in turn will hinder their ability to compete on a global scale, to entice investors and ultimately to stop the poverty cycle. One effective solution to deal with professionals leaving their
country
 is for their government to encourage them to stay by offering better work conditions.
This
 can be done by increasing wages and investing in state-of-the-art equipment and training to tempt doctors and teachers to continue working there. Another possible answer is for poorer countries offer better standards of living, more tolerance and a positive future as a way to entice them professionals back to their own
country
 after they have completed their training abroad.
However
, these solutions are financially demanding which means poorer governments may have to look to developed countries for aid in order to implement these changes. In conclusion, poorer countries are unable to develop due to the brain-drain which can only be tackled by enticing professionals to remain in their
country
 of origin through better conditions.

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