The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph shows the number of university
graduates
in Canada between the
year
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years
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1992 to 2006. The comparison is between both male and female
graduates
. In 1992, there were 70,000 males was graduated,
whereas
female graduate strength was around 100000. There was a steady growth in male
graduates
till 1995 and its fall till 1998.
However
, there was a little bump between
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the year
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year
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years
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1999 and 2000. After 2000
a
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the
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number of male people gradually increased and
during
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in
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2006 there
was
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were
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more than 90000
were
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graduated
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graduates
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. In female
graduation
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,graduation
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there was a slight up till 1995 and it fell till 1998.
subsequently
from
the
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1998
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,1998
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there was a huge increase in numbers. It was around 100,000 female
graduates
in the
year
1998 and it grows towards 150,000
graduates
in the
year
2006. In comparison, there were more female than male university
graduates
in
the
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Canada.
Moreover
, it will be good for the country's economy if females were educated.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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