The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The graph illustrates the data of university female and male
graduates
in Canada
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over the period of 16 years from 1992 to 2007.
Overall
, looking
into
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the graph the
numbers
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number
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of female
graduates
in Canada
were
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immensely high compared to male
graduates
throughout the given span of years. Regarding the year 1992, female
graduates
were on the hike
of
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nearly 99,000.
While
,
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males were in a steep decrease of nearly 71,000.
However
, both female
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, as well as male graduates,
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as well as
male
graduates
had an increase in number in the year between 1994 and 1996 (approx. 1, 05,000 and 75,000 respectively).
While
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1998
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both female and male
graduates
had a fall in the number.
Nevertheless
, by the end of the period 2006 female and male
graduates
had a steady increase
approx
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. 1, 48,000 and 98,000 respectively. To summarize, the numbers
female
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graduates
were higher than male
graduates
of universities in Canada for the year 1992 to 2007.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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