Table chart show the percentage of people 65+ in three different countries from 1988 to 2030.

Table chart show the percentage of people 65+ in three different countries from 1988 to 2030.
The table chart illustrates the proportion of
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who were 65 and over in three different countries Canada, Germany and the UK in various years.
To begin
with, it is undoubtedly clear that in 1988, the total proportion of people who were aged 65 and over was, accounted for 16.32% in Canada. The
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escalated by around 4% in 2000.
Besides
, it was predicted that the
population
of 65 and over aged will increase to approximately 26.35% in 2030.
Moreover
, the
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in Germany
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stood at 20.45%, which was followed by the
next
year close to 25.32%.
Moreover
,it was expected that in 2030 the
percentage
of aged people who were 65 and over will
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30.42%.
Furthermore
, in the UK, the proportion of 65 aged and over
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in 1988 and 2000, near about 14.89%, each.
Apart from
this
, it was estimated that the
percentage
of aged people will
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around
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20.35% during 2030.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
percentage
of
population
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the population
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displayed
overall
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rising trend
in
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every year except the first year of the UK
remaind
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remained
remains
remain
equal
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in percentage
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.
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