Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays? You should write at least 250 words. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Kinds of
music
people
listen
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are listening
nowadays are of different tastes and types.
For instance
, modern international pop and rap
music
, as well as
classical
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classic
traditional
country
songs all, vary from each other and people listen to them with great interests.
This
is because
music
has been
part
of our daily
lives even
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life, even
life even
in the ancient times. In
this
essay, reasons on why
music
is necessary for every Filipino people and the importance of the Philippine traditional folk
music
over foreign songs that young Filipinos and Filipinas always hear will be discussed.
Music
is a vital
part
of every Filipinos' lives.
Firstly
, Philippine folks considered it to be one of the most popular and ancient modes of human expressions. It features largely in all histories and all cultures and indeed has been one of the main ways of passing on cultural traditions to new generations of the
country
.
Secondly
, because of
this
, many people view
music
as a positive influence for the societies.
This
influence on individuals is wholly beneficial as it is a long-established way of communicating and helping us understand the whole range of human emotion and experience in a more spiritual language than words can represent.
However
, the classical
music
traditions of the Philippines are not necessarily
part
of the
music
many Filipinos and Filipinas experience today. In the modern world today, most of the
country
's young people constantly exposed themselves to loud modern foreign songs
as a result
of globalisation via the Internet. But I think that it is more important for young people of the
country
to learn
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learn
traditional
music
to enable them to know the origins of our Philippine ancestors. In conclusion, I think that we need traditional
music
because it is an integral
part
of the human expression that we cannot really separate from our lives even if there are the various
evolution
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evolutions
of modern
music
we tend to listen every day through the web nowadays
such
as American rap songs and Korean pop
music
.
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