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Nowadays air travel is cheaper than in the past. Is this a positive or a negative development? Discuss and give your own opinion.

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It is true that because of
traveling
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travelling
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 by
air
 has become more affordable, more
people
 are going abroad for their vacations
instead
 of spending time in their own
country
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 trend. On the one hand, discounted
air
 flying gives
people
 more opportunities to
transit
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travel
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 abroad more frequently.
Firstly
, having an abroad trip could give local
citizen
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citizens
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 chances to broaden new horizons;
for example
, they could make new friends with foreigners or promote cultural exchange and mutual understanding.
Secondly
,
people
 can save money for other
expenditure
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expenditures
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 like food or shopping when
while
 travelling on economical travelling. When the
fare
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fares
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 of airline tickets are cut down
on
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apply
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,
people
 will have more opportunities to visit other countries that are far from their own
country
.
For example
, students in developing countries like Vietnam could have organized trips to developing nations
such
 as America because of low fare
air
trip
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trips
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.
On the other hand
,
although
 the
low-cost
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low cost
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 of
air
 travel
provide
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provides
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 low priced tickets for
people
 to go abroad for their holidays,
this
 could bring drawbacks to their
country
's tourism industry. The local visitors indeed play a vital role in promoting the development of a
country
. To be specific, if the number of local citizens visiting places in their own
country
is decreased
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decreases
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 dramatically, the revenue of the whole
country
's tourism industry will be reduced.
As a result
, the amount of money spent on promoting and advertising these places to foreigners will be restricted, which results in bad outcomes for local
people
. In conclusion, there are both advantages and disadvantages
for
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 the fact that more
people
 spend their holidays abroad
instead
 of
their
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in their
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 own
country
 because of the
low fare
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low-fare
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air
 tickets.
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Task Response
Provide a more balanced discussion by elaborating on the negative effects of increased air travel on local tourism industries. You should also clearly state your opinion in the introduction and provide a balanced conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph is logically linked to the previous one and that there is a clear flow of ideas throughout the essay. Use transition words to connect your arguments more effectively.
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