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There is a big influence of peer group on children's behaviour. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? What can be done about it?

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Dear Mr. Smith, I
am Kritesh
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 Patel father of Krishna who is studying in your class 7-A (Roll No. 32). I am writing
this
 letter to enquire about an upcoming school trip to New York
next
 month.
To begin
 with, I have a few questions about
this
 trip.
First
, what is the main purpose of
this
 visit? I am expecting to have some learning experience to students who are participating in
this
 tour.
Furthermore
, How many days will you stay at each location? As I have few friends in the city who would like to meet her in the free time and would you allow
this
? As you are aware that Krishna is a special child, and she needs to follow the strict diet to maintain her health.
Although
 she is willing to eat the food made by the school's chef, she is allergic to food,
such
 as nuts and kiwi. If you do not mind,
then
 I would like her to carry some homemade food and medicine with her. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Yo
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urs sincerely, Kritesh Patel

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