It is sometimes thought that people who travel outside of their own country are more tolerant and understanding of others. To what extent do you agree?
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people
who spent
time out of their nation become more flexible in their Wrong verb form
spend
approach
and accept other's viewpoint
. I completely agree Fix the agreement mistake
viewpoints
to
the aforesaid statement as travelling exposes them to difficult situations wherein they question their own beliefs and introduces them to Change preposition
with
new
set of thinking. When Add an article
the new
a new
people
go outside they often find themselves in a vulnerable state, as how things or systems work, vary
from country to country. TheyCorrect subject-verb agreement
varies
experince
that things do not work out in Correct your spelling
experience
a
way Correct article usage
the
as
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apply
it
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they
works
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work
backhome
. Correct your spelling
back home
This
enlightens them that there are different approaches to work on the situation and in turn they become more considerate to
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of
others
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others'
other's
believes
. Replace the word
beliefs
For example
, Many
students who go outside Fix capitalization
many
for
study areChange preposition
to
preplexed
by the way other students Correct your spelling
perplexed
approach
the difficult concepts in study and imbibe others
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others'
other's
approach
to make it easier to understand the lessons. Correct subject-verb agreement
approaches
Moreover
, as people
travel they come across individuals of different nationalities who have a different belief system. Because they get to spend time with the
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apply
people
from different background
, they get to know about their cultures, value systemFix the agreement mistake
backgrounds
,
and thought Remove the comma
apply
process
. Exposure to novel ideas Fix the agreement mistake
processes
make
them widen their Change the verb form
makes
approach
and accept others with their differences. For example
, with increase
in global travel, there is a significant increase in the celebration of festivals like Add an article
an increase
the increase
christmas
, holi, etc., which Change the capitalization
Christmas
prior
used to be specific to a particular region. Rephrase
apply
To conclude
, I totally believe in the fact that travelling outside of one's own nation broadens the acceptance level of people
as it exposes them to new
set of functional world and tough situations make themAdd an article
the new
a new
suspectible
to Correct your spelling
susceptible
approach
things in new
way.Change the article
a new
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite