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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These
tables
 provide
information
 about the
sales
 made in a fair trade-tagged tea and
pineapple
, between 2010 and 2015. As additional
information
; when we look at the
tables
 for analysis, we can see that
,
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 both these two
tables
 include 6 rows and 3 columns. The columns show the countries, France,Austria, Germany,
Netherland
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Netherlands
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 and Norway,
while
 rows show the
sales
of
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for
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 years.
On the other hand
; As is absorbed from
the
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these
tables
;
First
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the First
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 table gives
information
 about the tea,
Second
 one shows
information
 about the
pineapple
.
Unit's
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 are measured in million euros.
Overall
; it can clearly be seen that there was an
i
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, crease in
sale
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sales
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almost
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in
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every nation for these products.The sale of
the
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tea
was
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sharply increased from 2,5 mıllıon of euros to 21 mıllıon in France. İt is
also
 can be seen that, Surprisingly, the highest
sales
 of these fair trades were during
sales
 of
pineapple
 in Austria, in 2015, around 48 mıllıon.We can infer that
its
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 about 3 fold increase. İn sharp contrast to
this
, the lowest
sales
 were during
sales
 of
pineapple
 in the Netherlands in 2010 was about 1,6 million
of
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euros.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tables, information, sales, pineapple with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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