Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

While many people are of the opinion that students who obtain outstanding academic results should be rewarded, another view shared by others is that those who
endeavor
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavour
to
study
and make great progress
also
deserve a reward as a form of encouragement. From my own perspective, it is my opinion that they all deserve the incentives from their places of learning. There are certain reasons for me and other people to share the opinion that awards should be given to top students.
This
reward system could create a highly competitive studying
environment
Suggestion
the environment
at school seeing that students often desire to win the prizes. The underlying explanation for
this
is that in the view of the narrow gap between them and straight A ones, these potential school children would have strong grounds to put greater effort into their
study
in the belief that they could be among the most excellent students in the foreseeable future, thereby receiving awards.
For example
, some universities usually publish their academic results in recognitions of top learners’ outstanding academic performance and offer them rewards, as well as the considerable effort put into studying
by
Suggestion
with
these students.
This
would eventually spur some students who are close to the top tier to
study
harder.
However
, I
also
believe that giving encouragement to those who make strides in their
study
results in more
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
outcomes. The reason is that
this
could give them a sense of equality.
In other words
, they could
also
stand a chance of getting a reward provided that they do make progress. By adopting
this
approach, the pupils who make academic improvements would feel that they’re on attempts
also
receiving recognition from their schools, thereby making more efforts to improve their studies. If school places sloe emphasis on academically excellent students and become oblivious to them, these learners would form the idea that rewards just find their own way to top students and that that fail to deserve any form of incentives
form
a giver or sender
from
their learning places.
Accordingly
,
this
would
demotivate
them and they,
therefore
, become negligent in their
study
. In conclusion, in spite of various opinions about
this
, I still take the view that A level students, as well as, those who achieve significant progress in their academic results, are all worthy of encouragement from their educational institutions.
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