The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. 

 Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below
The graphs show that
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japanese
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Japanese
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tourists were moving outside the country by
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roughly
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numbers in million,
while
the average of
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Australia's
trade was changing by percentage between 1985 and 1995. A glance at the two
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informations
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reveal
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that both
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values increased
by
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with a
coherance
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coherence
in the decade.
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,
in
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the
begining
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beginning
of the 85th,the first
graph
illustrates that over four
millions
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moved
to
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apply
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abroad. Following
to
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five years, the capacity
of
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for
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travelling was growth
until
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to
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nearly 11
millions
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million
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.
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the nineteens, the bars fluctuated slightly down and up between ten and twelve million
tourist
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tourists
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until 1993. In the
last
two years, the population reached almost 16
millons
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million
millions
.
Secondly
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graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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the
percentange
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percentage
of
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the tourist
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market
of the
japanese
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Japanese
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. the line
graph
steadly
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steadily
increased until 1988 from the onset. After that, a tiny percentage of
downsized
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market
was growth
steadly
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steadily
to over six
percen
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per cent
,
then
the
market
reached six
percent
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per cent
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between 1994 and 1995. To
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sum, both
graph
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graphs
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showed the same growth,
however
, some points
was
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were
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not matched
according
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to be
rising
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a rising
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trend between 1988 and 1992.
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there is
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no doubt that
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australia's
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Australia's
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share
market
link to
number
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a number
the number
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of
japanese
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Japanese
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tourist
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tourists
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, market with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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