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The bar chart provides an analysis of electricity generation and usage levels by the Top 10 global energy users in 2014.

The bar chart provides an analysis of electricity generation and usage levels by the Top 10 global energy users in 2014.
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A broad assessment of the data reveals that
China
 and the USA were by far the greatest users and producers of
electricity
,
while
 the bottom half of the Top 10 had similar
electricity
 production and
consumption
 needs.
China
 was the world’s leading energy generator and consumer in 2014, producing around 5500
billion
kWh
 and consuming almost the same amount. In
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 place, the USA produced and consumed about 20
percent
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 less
electricity
 than
China
. The remainder of the Top 5 – Russia, India, and Japan – generated and used up about four to five times less power than
China
 or the USA. In seventh and eighth place, France and Brazil both produced and consumed similar amounts of
electricity
, with production figures of approximately 550
billion
kWh
 and
consumption
 of around 450
billion
kWh
.
Furthermore
, it is interesting to note that ninth-placed Germany was the only country whose energy
consumption
 was higher than its production. In fact, its
consumption
 figures were the fifth-highest.
Finally
, rounding out the Top 10 was South Korea with
electricity
 generation and usage numbers a little under 500
billion
kWh
.

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