Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes(for example working for a charity,improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children.

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It has been suggested that high school students should be involved in unpaid community services as a compulsory part of high school programmes. Most of the colleges are already providing opportunities to gain

work

experience,

however

these are not compulsory. In my opinion, sending students to

work

in community services is a good idea as it can provide them with many lots of valuable skills. Life skills are very important and by doing voluntary

work

, students can learn how to communicate with others and

work

in a team, but

also

how to manage their time and improve their organizational skills. Nowadays, unfortunately, teenagers do not have many after-school activities. After-school clubs are no longer that popular and student mostly goes home and sit in front of the TV, browse the internet or play video games. By giving them compulsory

work

activities with charitable or community organizations, they will be encouraged to do something more creative. Skills gained through compulsory

work

will not be an asset on their CV but

also

increase their employability. Students will

also

gain more respect towards

work

and money as they will realize that it is not that easy to earn them and hopefully will learn to spend them in a more practical way. Healthy life balance and exercise are strongly promoted by the NHS, and

therefore

any kinds of spare time charity

work

will prevent from sitting and doing nothing. It could

also

possibly reduce the crime level in the high school age group. If students have activities to do, they will not be bored and come up with silly ideas which can be dangerous for them or their surroundings. In conclusion, I think

this

is a very good idea, and I hope

this

programme will be put into action for High School College shortly.

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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes(for example working for a charity,improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children.

Fully explain your ideas

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