The chart below shows local expenditure in 2010 and 2015.

The chart below shows local expenditure in 2010 and 2015.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of money spent on various government expenses in the period 2010-2015. In general, education, healthcare,
pensions
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and pensions
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were the main expenses, but defence, welfare, interest on borrowing, transport, culture and leisure and others took up a smaller proportion during the given years.
In contrast
, the greatest single expense was education at 24% in 2010, compared with 21%
at the end
of the year.Health care came in
second
place at 21% by the year 2010,
while
the actual proportion was lower at 20% in
the
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2015. Another major expense was
pensioned
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pension
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, it showed unchanged numbers at 19% over
this
five-year period.
According to
the rest of the portion,
its
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it is
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obvious that they have demonstrated
lower
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a lower
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percentage from 17% to 1% in 2010-2015.
For instance
: defence (17%-14%), welfare (8%-13%), interest on borrowing (5%-10%), transport (3%-1%), culture and leisure (2%-1%), other (1%-1%) during the covered period 2010-2015
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