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Whilst a number of people argue that the old should live apart from young people and

in particular

area, others advocate that they should live with their children and other groups of people. There are rational arguments on both sides of

this

contentious topic which will be discussed in detail, followed by my own take on the matter. On the one hand, there are those reasoning that old people should live in

special

Suggestion

a special society

society

.

Firstly

, having weak body, old people need medical and nursing care and they need to be taken care of, whereas, in special community, the government can provide

old

Suggestion

older

people with better welfare services,

such

as health care

centers

an area that is approximately central within some larger region

centres

and well-trained nursing staff, which is appropriate for old people.

This

in turn could lighten a great burden on families as well as

society

.

Secondly

, with the galloping development of economy and technology, many senior citizens will be confronting a huge problem of adjusting to the modern

society

. So, older generations are having trouble keeping up with the modern technologies.

Therefore

, being in a special

society

and with their friends can help them live without stress. According the recent survey,

old

Suggestion

older

people living with their friends and

free

Suggestion

freedom

of modern technologies exhibit less stress than their

counter parts

a person or thing having the same function or characteristics as another

counterparts

living in modern

society

.

On the other hand

, the opposing view asserts that the old should live with their families and children.

Firstly

, it will certainly benefit the young generation. In fact, old generation

follow

Suggestion

follows

rational thinking and social awakening to sort out their problems, while, new generations have overthrown traditional and conventional notions.

Thus

, the youth can absorb knowledge and experience from the old, which can prevent them from making detours.

Secondly

, old people could

lend other

Suggestion

lend to other

members of their family a helping hand.

For instance

, the old can look after the children of a family, so, for the young seeking help from their parent helps them save the money. To conclude, there are valid arguments on both sides of the controversy;

however

, it is my firm conviction that the old should be among people in one

society

and enjoy being with their families.

In addition

, the old could bring great benefits to young people and help them mentally and financially.