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The chart below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 to 2000 and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 to 2000 and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two bar charts give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 to 2000
as well as
their
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 marital status of adult
Americans
 in two of the years.
Overall
, the number of
Americans
 married over the 4 years was higher than the number of USA separated.The ratio of marriage between adults in America was much higher than any other marital status in the USA. In 1970 and 1980, the number of
Americans
 married was 2.5 million.The rate declined to about 2.5 and 2 million
in
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 1990 to 2000 respectively.The rate
divorces
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, change over the 4 periods.The highest estimate of separation was in 1980,
while
 the lowest rate of divorce was in 1970. The
percent
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 of marital ground between adult
Americans
was risen
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in
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 1970 to 2000, it was 70% and approximately 59% respectively.The proportion of adults in 2000 was higher than that in 1970 by around 10%.
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