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Family work and children. Support children from theeir parents.

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In the past, a typical family consisted of a father who went out to
work
 and a mother who stayed at home and looked after the children. Nowadays, it is the norm for
both
 parents to
work
.
This
 situation can affect
children
Accept comma addition
children, both
both
 positively and negatively. Some people think that the children of working parents are in an
advantages
Suggestion
advantage
 position
were
In or at or to what place
where
 their parents are able to afford more luxuries
such
 as new clothes, video games or mobile phones. Proponents of
this
 view argue that children are able to enjoy and experience more
from
Suggestion
of
 life due their parents’ extra wealth,
for example
, by going foreign holidays.
On the other hand
,
however
, there are those who claim that when
both
 parents
work
, their children do not get enough support and attention; meaning that these children might not do as well at school because there is no one at home to provide support with
such
 things as homework or exam revision. The absence of parents at home could make it easier for children to get involved in
such
 things as drugs or underage drinking. When I was growing up,
both
 my parents worked and I was always well provided for.
On the other hand
, I think that it would sometimes have been better if I could have seen more of my parents. In conclusion, I believe that we cannot change the fact that
both
 parents have to
work
 nowadays, It is not an ideal situation, but if parents make time for their children in the evenings and at the weekends,
then
 the children will not suffer in any way. It must be stated that the extra income generated by
both
 parents working, makes for a much higher standard of living which benefits the whole family.
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