Developing and buying medicine is expensive and some believe that money would be better spent on preventing disease from arising in the first place.

It is true that whether
money
for developing and buying
money
or preventing people from diseases is a subject of debate. While reasons can be given to justify the latter, I somewhat agree with the former point.On the on hand, there are strong reasons to believe that preventing options not always kept man from suffering illness.
Firstly
, it is true that there are so much disagreement from doctors, professors, and knowledgeable citizens if the regime limited budget for developing drugs since pathogens and pandemic generally outbreak suddenly.
For instance
, smoking is an identified cause of cancer, but choosing not to smoke does not guarantee that you will not develop lung cancer because it still occurs in non-smokers.  
On the other hand
, others would agree that the
money
would be better spent on preventing disease from arising in the
first
place. The
first
prominent justification is that if we keep looking and finding ways to cure illness, we are more likely to find out methods, which help people to stop them from occurring at the start.
For example
, while searching for ways to cure a cold, scientists discovered that an effective way to avoid catching one was frequent hand cleaning, but prior to the science, it was mistakenly believed that avoiding cold air would keep the virus away.  
Therefore
, it is true that take a great deal of
money
to develop new medicines,
however
, those investments lead to more informed methods for keeping people healthy. In conclusion, while there are people who agree that better preventing than cure, it seems that the contrary point is in favour of myself.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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