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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The given table demonstrates the count of visitors who came to the Ashdown museum throughout the year of its
renovation
, before and after. The pie chart illustrates the survey outcome which was done by interviewing comers about their satisfaction before
renovation
 and after. At a glance, there is a significant increment
of
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visitor
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visitors
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 after the refurbishment. Before the refurbishment it was 74000 and after it was 92000. There was
a
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 18000 rise
than
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 the previous year correspondingly. Exploring the chart,
it
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shows five measures of
the
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satisfaction have been plotted in two pie charts. Mainly the sense of satisfaction
of
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 the
renovation
 has been shown. There is an improvement
of
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very
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the very
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 satisfied
category
 by 20, earlier it was 15 after it was 35. Correspondingly the satisfied
category
 was increased. There was an improvement
by
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 10 after doing all
this
. Relatively Dissatisfied and Very dissatisfied
count
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counts
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also
 decreased after the refurbishment. It can see an enormous level of
decreasing
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on
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dissatisfied
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the dissatisfied
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category
. Even though the no response
category
 remained
same
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the same
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 before and after the
renovation
 of the museum.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words renovation, category with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "improvement" was used 2 times.
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