There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks.

Dear Sir
,
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,
I am writing
this
letter regarding to service
problem
of bus in our area. I am living at Vinzol
Gam which
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Gam, which
is near to SP ring road. The buses which
are arrive
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arrive
are arriving
have arrived
in our
area it
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area, it
is
comes
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coming
always late and not punctual regarding their
time
. And especially in the morning
time
buses come late, most of people duty start hour is between 9.00 a.
m
.
to
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To
9.30 a.
m
. Bus timing is 8.45 a.
m
.
but
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But
it always comes after 9.00 a.
m
.
which
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Which
is very late and because of
this
we always get late at our job. So much
time
we complain to conductor and bus
driver but
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driver, but
they are not taking our
problem
seriously. Same in the evening
time
my office off
time
is 7.00 p.
m
.
and
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And
bus
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the bus
comes late every
time
after 7.30 p.
m
.
because
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Because
of it I cannot go home on
time
. I
suggest please
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suggest, please
notify the driver and conductor to take timing related
problem
seriously and come on
time
as per schedule. You can arrange more buses during pick up hour to solve
this
problem
. I hope you will notice my
problem
and take necessary action as early as possible. Yours sincerely

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