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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Column chart depicts the
number
 of men and women
education
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educated
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 in Britain in
division
Add an article
the division
a division
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 of three phrases classified into full-time and part-time from the
year
 1970 to 1990.
Firstly
, Male pursues both Full-time
education
 and Part-time
education
 .
Number
Correct article usage
The number
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 of males for Full-time
education
 in the
year
 1970
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 marked 100 and
has
Unnecessary verb
apply
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increased gradually to 250 in the
year
 1991 respectively.
However
 Part-time
education
 is 1000 in the
year
 1970 and experienced a dip in the
year
 1980 to 850.
Although
 has increased in the
year
 1991
at
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to
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 900.
Secondly
,
Female
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Females
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 with Full-time
education
are
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is
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 50 in
number
 during 1970 and 200 in the
year
 1980 rising to 250 in the
year
 1991. The
number
 of
Part-time
Fix capitalization
part-time
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education
 in the
year
 1970 is nearly 700 increasing to 800 in the
year
 1980 and
rose
Wrong verb form
rising
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 to 1100 in the
year
 1991. In conclusion, Full-time
education
 is studied less compared to Part-time
education
 as they get time to work and earn simultaneously.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, education, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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