The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.

Nowadays, obesity has become a major problem

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not only others but

also

children

. In

western

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society

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society,

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the percentage of overweight

children

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by 20% in the

last

decade. The main reason why I believe is incorrect nutrition and hereditary

factor

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causes and effects and present a final conclusion. One problem is that overeating sweet or harmful

foods

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food

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.

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, in our modern life majority of

children

really keen on

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fast foods and candies like hamburgers, hot dogs, pizzas, chocolates and cakes which are include lots of chemicals which harmful to their

body

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and

organism

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kind of

products

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delicious

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and yummy,

that is

why, useful products like fruits and vegetables are not as popular as junk foods. Another drawback is that hereditary factor which depends on genetics. If the

children

's parents and grandparents with excess weight,

then

most likely the

children

will

also

be fat . Unfortunately, incorrect nutrition and obesity

leads to

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not

the

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best effects

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health and appearance.

Firstly

,

children

's overweight

effect

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of

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their physical and mental health.

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, they are suffering from digestion system, doing hard exercises,

foot

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and foot

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and spine diseases. Overthrow , most of the body is covered in fats,

all

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organs

facing with

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various diseases.

Secondly

, obesity

also

effect

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to

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peoples'

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appearance .

Children

with

such

physiques,

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problem

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problems

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to find

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the right clothes with

right

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size or excess fat even on the face,

accordingly

they can feel themselves timidly and shyly.

To sum up

all

views

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above, can come to the conclusion that, incorrect nutrition leads to

overweight

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being overweight

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and it in turn leads to worse effects like problems with health and body