Task 1: The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie
chart
illustrates productive farming
land
in
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around the world is reduced by the main
some
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reasons,
while
the table
present
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information about the percentage of
land
degraded by several causes, namely deforestation, over-cultivation and over-grazing in three different areas of the world in the 1990s.
Overall
,
it is clear that
in the first
chart
, over-grazing animals is the biggest reason
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agricultural
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become worse,
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that deforestation and over-cultivation.
The
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second
chart
, Europe was
an
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area that has affected the highest and North America is the lowest. In the first
chart
, the proportion of
land
degraded
due to
having too many animals feeding on it is the highest
with
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35%, compared
deforestation
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to deforestation
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and
overcultivation
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over-cultivation
were 30% and 28%, respectively. The percentage of other
cause
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causes
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is 7%. In the
second
chart
, Europe is the area where the highest total
land
degraded is 23%,
while
the figure for North America and Oceania were 5% and 13%, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, land with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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