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The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below. » You should write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below. » You should write at least 150 words.
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The charts give information about why
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 people decide to study and their opinion on how the costs of each course should be shared,
according to
 the survey participants.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the interest in
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 and gaining qualifications are the main reasons
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for
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 adults’ decision to continue their education and most of the costs must be funded by individuals themselves. In
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, the first bar graph shows that 40% of people are lured to study because they
interested
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 in the program and 38% enrol to obtain the qualification. The following reasons which are helpful for current jobs, to improve prospects of promotion and enjoy learning were in a range between 22% and 20%.
While
, the least number of students, their purpose was to able to change jobs and to meet people (12% and 9% respectively).
According to
 the pie graph,
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individual
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individuals
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 have to be the highest cost bearer for
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 own study (40%).
Next
, comes the employer
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at
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 35%, and after that the taxpayer with 25% of the fees.
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