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2019-12-28: Task 1 You work in an international company. Write letter to the manager for allowing extra hours off during work time to attend family celebration. In your letter, you should: • explain why you want to take a day off • give details of the amount of time you need • suggest how your work be covered while your are away.

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Dear sir or madam, I am writing
this
 letter to request you to grant me an allowance to leave from work early on the 9th to 12th of April 2020. Let me illustrate
further
 about the situation, it's my sister’s wedding, which is due
next
 week on the given dates. Since it's a wedding there are heaps of work;
for instance
, organising, hosting and managing the event, and most of it is pending.
Moreover
, my father cannot handle everything by himself as he is diabetic and hypertensive, and so there is a strict regime that he need to follow and plus he is not allowed to take stress anytime at all.
Therefore
, in order to make things run smoothly I need to be there to handle all of
this
.
Furthermore
, my shift ends around 7 P.M, and
thus
 it would extremely helpful if you could allow me leave by 5 p.m.
In addition
 to
this
, the wedding is on the 11th of April and everything needs to sort out before that. Even though it's just two hours, but that would be sufficient enough to assist and manage the pending task. In my absence, my colleague Mr.Sadik Fumakiya would handle my assignments till the required time, and
also
 he would contact me for daily report as well as inform if there are any emergencies.
Additionally
, I shall be working overtime to complete all the unfinished tasks. I hope you would understand my situation and take actions favourably. Thanking you. Yours sincerely, Shakib Qureshi
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