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The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart represents the information on UAE government spending money from the budget of AED 315
billion
 for different sectors in 2000.
Overall
,
government
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the government
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 spends the highest
amount
for
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on
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 social security about more than the quarter
amount
 in total
while
 the lowest supply was to transport services.
It is clear that
although
the
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social security costs 100
billion
, the
second
 highest money went to health and personal social services with 53
billion
. At the same time, Education expends about 38
billion
.
Moreover
, the ministry spends almost equal
amount
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amounts
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 for defence, Debt interest and other
expenditure
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expenditures
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 with nearly 23
billion
.
Further
, expenses for low and order and housing, heritage and environment were almost 16 million.
Finally
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 the lower number other than transport was to
industry
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 agriculture and employment.
To sum up
, we can get a clear idea that
union
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unions
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 gave more
important
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importance
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 to social security.
Also
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 spend a considerably higher
amount
of
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on
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 health and personal social services and education.
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