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The charts below show UK and USA energy consumption in 2000 and 2006.

The charts below show UK and USA energy consumption in 2000 and 2006.
#show #uk #usa #energy #consumption
The charts delineate the
consumption
 of
energy
 between 2000 and 2006 in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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 and
USA
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the USA
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.
It is clear that
 the percentage of
oil
consumption
 surged overwhelmingly in both countries between 2000 and 2006.
However
,
gas
 was the most-chosen source of
energy
 in 2006 compared to nuclear power. Looking at the details,
oil
 was the most utilized source in UK and USA in 2000,at approximately 27% and 37% .In the same year other renewable sources,
by contrast
,were less common in both countries than the proportion of
oil
,
gas
 and coal,at 10% and 5% respectively. In 2006, the rate of
gas
consumption
 shot up by 19%(from 20 to 39)in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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.
However
,in
USA
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the USA
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 there was a slight rise in
gas
energy
 (25%). Nuclear power made up a small proportion
in
Change preposition
of
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 the
energy
consumption
 in both countries,
while
 the rate of
oil
 remained unchanged in
Correct article usage
the two-aformentioned
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two-aformentioned
Correct your spelling
two-aforementioned
 years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, energy, oil, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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