With the development of technology and science, some people believe that there is no great value of artists such as musicians and painters. What are the things artists can do but the scientist cannot? Why should we encourage the art area?

It is true that
science
and technology, nowadays, have
benefitted
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benefited
the whole world in all aspects. Albeit it is undoubted that various technological and scientific developments have
tremedously
extremely
tremendously
enhanced our lifestyle, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
firmly believe that
art
,
cultural
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culture
cultures
and traditions still play an essential
roles
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role
in out lives. There are so many things that artists can teach us in the field that scientists have failed to.
To begin
with, there are concepts
such
as feelings, emotions and inspiration that comes from arts, whereas
science
and technology cannot offer them due to its focus on practicality.
For example
, an audience can indirectly experience and have a feeling of melody from listening to
bethoven's
pieces which was composed while he was suffering from unfortunate events.
In contrast
,
science
cannot offer
this
because it is unable to deliver
such
feeling.
Additionally
, a piece of abstract
art
has no meaning in
science but
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science, but
has great stories to tell when we consider it an
art
. In the world of arts, beauty matter in and of
themselves whereas in
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themselves, whereas in
science
, the only true measure is whether it works or not.
Arts
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The arts
offer us a
spritual
concerned with sacred matters or religion or the church
spiritual
look of
life
while scientist teaches us just an opposite. Since the arts
brings
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bring
a lot of benefits to us so I argue that it must and should be encouraged to some extents. Enjoying
arts
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the arts
promotes
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promote
the habit of self-reflection. If you walk into the
art
gallery, attend to a concert or even just stay to read a book, you almost certainly begin to think about your inner value. For me,
this
is an invaluable lesson in
life
because if we begin to reflect about ourselves, we
begin
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are beginning
not to just become more human, but
also
consider the lies of other too.
Moreover
, creative people can boost us emotionally and change our
feeling
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feelings
.
For example
, a lot of Mozart's fans would love to listen to his music pieces because they feel
relieves
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relieved
and motivated, so music can controls our emotions and switch them in a positive ways. In conclusion, there is no denying the fact that
science
and technology have great value in our
life
, but in term of arts, it can teaches us many aspects of
life
that the former cannot
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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