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You are writing for a company. You need to take days off and want to ask to your manager

#company #manager
Dear Tania I am writing
this
 letter to you regarding taking some unpaid days for
next month
Suggestion
the next month
. My sister's marriage is happening
next
 month on April9, 2020 in Toronto. For that we have to do some preparations in advance and invite guests.
Moreover
, I am the only person in my family to take responsibility of
this
 event to support my parents. Apart from
this
, we have so many tasks to pursue. To participate on
this
 occasion I would need to be away from work for a week from April 9 to April15. My schedule for
this
 week is relatively light. I already talked to one of my coworkers to take care some of my projects, for Meetings which I handed out her yesterday. She has agreed to play her role in my absence. So,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will be grateful to you if you will approve my request to attend the wedding of my sister. Your' faithfully Lilly

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