You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table illustrates the proportion of the monthly household income of five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. The proportion of household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The table illustrates the proportion of the monthly household income of five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The proportion of household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment
The table illustrates the five different European
countries
spend their household income on
food
and drinks, housing, clothing and
entertainments
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entertainment
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. It is immediately apparent all five
countries
spent most of
the
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household income on
food
and drinks and housing.
To begin
with, France, Germany and UK spend
majority
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the majority
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of their income on housing, at 31%, 33% and 37% respectively.
In contrast
, they spend around a quarter on
food
and drink.
Opposite
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The opposite
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was true for Turkey and Spain they spend
large
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a large
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amount on
food
and drinks, at 36% and 31%, and on housing, at 20% and 18% respectively.
On the other hand
, all five
countries
spend much less on
the
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clothing and entertainment. France and Spain spend less than 10%.
While
the other three
countries
spend the same around
the
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13%.
Furthermore
, Germany
spend
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most on the clothing, at 19 %
whereas
UK and Turkey spend half of the amount. In conclusion, Housing was
largest
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the largest
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expenditure item for France, Germany and UK
while
the
food
and drink was
biggest
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the biggest
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expenditure for Turkey and Spain.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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