The line graph below shows the consumption of 4 kinds of meat in a European country from 1979 to 2004.
The graph illustrates the ingestion of meat and
fish
over a period of 25 years (from 1979 to 2002) in a country of
Europe. Change preposition
in
Overall
, the most noticeable trend is that chicken is the only product that has risen significantly in the amount consumed in grams
per person and per week. While
,
there has been a dramatic decrease in Remove the comma
apply
beef
and lamb
. This
means, for meat
thereAdd a comma
meat,
has
been fluctuations Change the verb form
have
year
by year
. Nevertheless
, the ingestion of fish
remains constant over the years, around 50 grams
per week. In the first place, chicken was the most popular product for people from 1994, when its eating was higher than lamb
. The quantity of chicken per person was slightly under 150 grams
in 1979 reaching 250 grams
in 2004. In the second place, lamb
and beef
had similar paths. The line of beef
was higher than the line of lamb
. In the first year
, the consumption for
Change preposition
of
beef
was up to 200 grams
, and for
Change preposition
of
lamb
was 150, across the years both suffered significant high and low peaks, but with the same end, a decrease approximated of
150 Change preposition
apply
grams
per person in 2004 from 1979. Finally
, the least common product was fish
, only 50 grams
ingered
per individual. Correct your spelling
injured
entered
However
, fish
has been the food with the least changes in the quantity eating
from the first Wrong verb form
eaten
year
to the last
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