The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram provides information about
life
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the life
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cycle of salmon which is large species
fish
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of fish
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.
Overall
, the salmon goes through four stages in life. The whole process continues
about
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10 years. First of all, adult
salmons
lay eggs on small stones and reeds in
upper
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the upper
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river where
water
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the water
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is slow moving. After that small
salmons
that are named
fries
hatch out from eggs. In
this
stage,
fries
are 3-8 centimetres. In the following stage,
fries
go to the lower river.
In here
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Here
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, water is fast flowing. They live here
approximately
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4 years. Afterwards,
fries
become smolts with a length of 12-15 centimetres.
Following
this
, smolts move to the open sea and
then
they live here
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5 years. Ultimately, they turn to adult
salmons
with a length of 70-76 centimetres.
Then
they go to the upper river again and lay eggs. Adult
salmons
do
this
process again

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salmons, fries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "goes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "goes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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