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Some people think that it is a good thing for senior management positions to have very high salaries compared to other workers of lower positions in the same company. To what extent do you agree.

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It is often argued that higher management has bigger salaries as compared to
lower position
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 workers.
However
, some people believe
this
 is unfair and want a change. In my opinion, I slightly disagree
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 statement and will provide illustrations for the same. First of all, in a company there are many layers of work and some of them require expertise. Not all people can work in
such
 positions as it is more demanding, those having
position
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 at higher levels
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we see,
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are highly educated and have practical knowledge of all jobs which are being carried under the banner of a company.
For instance
, A CEO knows how a product is manufactured from scratch and how to manage the production as well.
Secondly
, they are equipped with skilful knowledge which is used in all directions of task,
thus
 they are responsible for each and everything aspect
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 the association. They are not confined to a corner of the job, but they look for all the jobs being carried out in the company. Higher
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responsibility is compensated by higher salaries.
For example
, a worker does not know how to manage money and
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accounts, it can only be managed by a highly skilled employee. Lower posts are more on the ground and relate to specific work in a specific job,
on the contrary
,
high
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 posts people manage various domains at once.
Thus
,
to conclude
,
higher level
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 worker devotes time and incur responsibility more as compared to
lower level
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worker
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 so they should
give
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 higher
salary
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salaries
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.
However
, some facilities
such
 as Mediclaim should be given to all irrespective of their positions.
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