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some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it cause serious pollution and uses up the worlds 's fuel resources .to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Some might argue, that
air
travel
 is causing major harm to the environment in the matter of burning a tremendous amount of fossil
fuel
 each year and depleting the world oil reserve, and demand that it should be limited.
Although
,
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 it's irrefutable that flying jets cause damage to the environment, I,
however
, firmly disagree that it is beneficial to minimize the number of flights or restrict them.
This
 essay addresses the reasons behind my opposition. One significant reason to support my claim is that many government's economies depend solely on the income provided by the tourism sector which is vitally
depended
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 on
the
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air
travel
. For
further
 elaboration, in a country
such
 as Egypt tourism industry generate more than 5 billion U.S. Dollars annually and provide more than 2 million job, naturally most of the tourists if not all come through airports, since you
could
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travel
 across continents in mere hours and it has become more and more convenient means of
travel
 nowadays, so it will impact the economy in a destructive manner if
air
travel
 was to be restricted or banned in any way. In fact, it will increase the unemployment rate exponentially,
Therefore
, it's really impractical
economy wise
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 to tackle
this
 concerning issue Another reason in favour of my opinion
that
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 many environmentalists have proven that
air
travel
 is rather friendly to the environment in comparison to other means of transportation.
additionally
, ground and maritime transportation means producing more than triple carbon dioxide emissions and
consume
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 way more fossil
fuel
 than
air
travel
.
As a result
, it's quite trivial to even think
in
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 making any reparations in the
air
travel
 sector before addressing the largest carbon emitters which are far more concerning to tackle. In conclusion, even if the flight schedule globally could be minimized somehow, it is not a viable or
a
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long term
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 solution to tackle fossil
fuel
 depletion or carbon dioxide emissions.
Moreover
,
scientist
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 must find a fossil
fuel
 replacement in the near future.

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