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You are interested in applying for a scholarship program to study at a foreign university. Write a letter to inquire about the course. In your letter: •explain which course you are interested in •say what you know about the university •explain why you should receive the scholarship

#scholarship #program #study #university #course #•explain #•say
Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to express my interest
for
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 a scholarship program offered by your
university
. I have done my Post graduation from
University
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the University
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 of Lahore in the field of marketing. Now, I look forward to
apply
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 for the course
of
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in
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 Digital Marketing. As
,
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this
 course is now high in demand and covers wide market segments.
Moreover
, I want to pursue
my
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 career in the same field. I am very much convinced that Queen’s
University
 is an excellent opportunity to excel
my
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 education.
This
university
 provides
suitable
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 learning environment to
their
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its
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 students.
This
 institute is considered among the best in the world.
Last
 year, it
has been
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 awarded with “Best Learning Institute Award”. I consider pride to be part of
this
 prestigious
university
. I belong to a
middle class
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 family. I received
scholarship
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a scholarship
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 during my post graduation because of my highest GPA.
Furthermore
,
this
 course helps me to enhance my career.
As
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apply
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,
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 I have
the
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work experience
of
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Digital
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a Digital
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 Marketing Consultant and managed to successfully complete several projects.
This
 scholarship will support me in making my future a success. I really look forward
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for
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 your response. Yours Faithfully, Talha Hussain

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greeting and closing
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task response
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